fist simple page made by myself

[cooltiger]

this is my first time to make web page...only some pictures and company profile:o

http://www.scootersmanufacturer.com/

[dangergeek]

For a first site...


It's actually very good.

Too much text. It puts me off reading it all. Maybe add a few pictures to the picture to split up the text.

You need a menu bar as well. Your users will be expecting something to navigate with.


Overall, nice and simple. Good pictures. Thumbs up:)

[wh666-666]

Whow way too much text !!

Think of visitors as having the reading comprehension of a 2 year old. One distracted by nappy rash!

For example your first paragraph:
Lifang Motor (Group) Co., LTD. registered and established in Hong Kong in 1996, is a notification enterprise specialized in motorcycle and engine manufacturing.. After ten years' development, Lifang gradually formed into a professional group with its own characteristics in sports vehicle composed of production, development and marketing, full integration of the most competitive motorcycle strong resources in China . Now Lifang is consisted of 3 totally invested or holding subsidiaries: “Wuxi Lifang Motorcycle manufacture Co., LTD” “Taizhou Lifeng Motorcycle manufacture Co., LTD” and “Hangzhou Lifang Industry& Trading Co., LTD”, spread areas such as Hong Kong, Wuxi , Taizhou and Hangzhou , integrate China 's most competitive motorcycle resources of production and development Lifang Group owns the brand of “FADA” “LIFANG” and “ALISEN”, and has been awarded “ISO 9000” and “CCC” certificates. The terminal products mainly include motorcycles, scooters, ATVs, dirt bikes, engines, etc.


Simply summed up, off the top of my head of course;
"Welcome. We have been established for over 10 years in hong kong manufactuering superior quality products from scooters to dirt bikes to ATV's but a few, that meet the most rigorous standards in the industry."

There we are. One very long paragraph in one sentence. There may be the odd person that wants to know absoloutely everything about the company but most people wont care about:

"Now Lifang is consisted of 3 totally invested or holding subsidiaries: “Wuxi Lifang Motorcycle manufacture Co., LTD” “Taizhou Lifeng Motorcycle manufacture Co., LTD” and “Hangzhou Lifang Industry& Trading Co."

Im not trying to rubbish you at all but just provide constructive critisism. I agree with dangergeek on the menu bar as well. You need more than one page. Simplify the company profile page maybe even with a picture timeline of the companies and then have other pages like products promoting the brand.

[boutte]

Looks good, I didn't read all the text but I think the idea of being more succinct is a good one. But it's always good to have enough content that you can get your keywords in and your message across. Nice job.

[postie]

You site tempted me to actually register here, as opposed to just looking.

If this is your first attempt, you are doing really well. As it loaded, and even with very little interest in Scooters myself, it made me say out loud, "Cool!".. which isn't something I do every day!

As the others have said above, yes, waaaaaaay too much text. I suggest you completely look at that again - imagine you were me - would I want to read all of that to find out the ONE piece of info I came looking for? Or am I going to go find it elsewhere? Even if you have a neat site, info is everything and boredom is death.

So, cut out everything irrelevant. You can have it elsewhere on your site for those who really want the ultra-fine detail, but up front, nope, get it cut down to a tenth the size.

The only other thing I would say is that at the base of your page you have an email link. Nice. BUT, consider having a form to automatically email you. The very worst thing I find on websites, personally, is to have to leave a site to contact you by opening up my email. if you have a contact form, it keeps people on your site, it keeps me happy and it is easier.... just my opinion though :)

Swish site, and you'll go far!

ps. just thinking - ever heard of the Mod or Ska music scene in the UK? they all LOVE scooters, especially Italian vespas and lambrettas, check out some websites there, you WILL get some interest.

[KDLA]

You might take a moment to validate your coding: http://validator.w3.org/check?verbose=1&uri=http%3A%2F%2Fwww.scootersmanufacturer.com%2F

Regarding the coding -- it is quite odd. You have several table cells left blank. If those areas aren't needed, you should change your layout. All that extra coding just junks up your page.

KDLA

[cooltiger]

updated my site depend on comment...:)

[WebJoel]

the way it looks now, is rather cute. :)

[cooltiger]

now my website is Invest Money Guide.org (http://www.InvestMoneyGuide.org)

[cooltiger]

i parked http://www.scootersmanufacturer.com/ with sedo and make some small cash...